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Writing Wednesday: Drafting a Break

Break? What break? Haha. So, RoW80 is on break. I’m not. I’ve actually been writing more words during the break than I was before I think. Trying to get Cam and Gio back together after breaking them up is taking some work. Soon, I think. Very soon.

I’ll get to the progress I’ve made so far, but first, I’m still looking for some beta readers for Healing the Heart, my follow-up to Duty to Protect. There are some references to that first book, but I don’t think it’s necessary to have read it to enjoy this one(though I may need unbiased eyes to tell me if that’s true or not).

And second, it’s WiPPet Wednesday time! WOOHOO! Okay, maybe I get a little too excited about that. or maybe I’ve had too much coffee(nope, nope, NOPE. Not a possibility). Anyway, since I am still working on Closing Time, that’s what I’ll be sharing from again today. I have 14 paragraphs(9+28+1-6).

He knew he’d never get his mother off track. “There’s this guy,” he admitted.

At his mother’s light laugh, he glanced up through the hair hanging in his face. he never thought he’d hear her laugh about this. That he’d be a constant disappointment for her and worry, since it might not always be a girl he brought home.

“I imagine this is the same guy your sister was telling me about the last week. Your bartender, right?”

Why had Caitie said anything about it? Usually she was so good about keeping his secrets. His mom must have noticed his distress, because she added, “She was just worried about you, Gio. She knew what he did to Nolan, and-”

“I know,” he said before she could say more. He was the youngest, so he was used to the other three trying to protect him. But, he was twenty-five now. And Caitie would have been pissed if Cormac and Brann did that to her. In fact, they had, with Mark, and she had put them in their place. He couldn’t do that, though, because she was still away on her honeymoon. “I know now what he did, but I still…I’m scared,” he admitted. “But, I don’t know if it’s enough.”

“Enough for what, sweetie?”

“For me to stay away from him. I should, so he doesn’t do the same to me. But, there’s just something about him. I don’t want to stay away.”

She moved her chair closer to him and stroked a hand down his hair to soothe him, just as she had when he’d been younger. She’d never told him that boys didn’t cry, or that he shouldn’t be upset about something. She just let the storm play out until it was over.

“Maybe you should stop trying,” she said gently. “Your father terrified me plenty when we first met, too.”

He shook his head. “I can’t believe that. You two are still so in love.”

She pulled back and smiled at him. “That we are. Because he’s a tenacious bastard.”

A laugh burst out of Gio at that. But, her smile remained soft. “Here was this bartender, new to town. And me with my shiny new badge. He was big and bold and brash.” She paused then said, “Granted your brothers take after him more there, but I still hold you’re the most like him. He had the sweetest, most gentle heart, and it bruised easily. I bruised it. He scared me because he made me feel so much, and I lashed out at him. But, he never gave up on me.”

“Mom.” Tears welled in his eyes now. His dad had told this story enough times, he practically knew it by heart. But, he’d never heard it from his mother’s perspective.

She just smiled at him and used her thumb to wipe away his tears. “You have his heart, Gio. And you see the good in people, just as he always has, even when I struggle to see past the bad they do. Just…be careful. I don’t want to see your heart bruised too badly.”

Writing this scene made me really want to write out Dougal and Shae’s story. *glances at list of side projects* Hmmm, maybe I could slip it in, too. 😉 So, will Gio give things with Cam a chance? Will it work out for them?(Still working on that one)

And third, finally, my progress so far this week:

  • Write 13000 words(10000 on main project: Closing Time) – 6923 words so far.
    • Closing Time – 6435 words – “You still didn’t have the right to tell a secret that belonged to me. The same exact thing Cam did to Nolan that you’re still so upset about. And this is worse. I never expected to be betrayed by my own brother.”
    • Break on Me – 488 words – Lora let Gabriel lead her to the bed, taking in the view of his strong back. She thought she could stare at it all night long. Then, she thought about how he’d just pressed her up against the door. And how he’d felt against her. Okay, maybe not all night. She definitely wanted to do more with him than look.
  • Edit: Work in Worldbuilding details for Guarding the Heart – I’ve added 107 words so far. This takes place in the “real world” so mostly I’m making sure the setting details are clear.
  • Plot: Toby & Denise – Outline – I’ve got the plot summaries and character arcs finished. Hoping to finish it this week.
  • Side Projects: Add 2500 words – 0/2500 words. Hopefully I’ll get to these sometime this week.
  • Story a Day – write 5 stories – I’ve written 3/5 stories this week.
  • Read: Writing Active Hooks – 100% – up to 82%
  • Listen: Hour of Need(Melinda Leigh) & Frost Like Night(Sara Raasch – this just came out & it jumped the list) – I finished Hour of Need yesterday(enjoyed this one). Started Frost Like Night. Listened to almost 2.5 hours/12.5 so far).
  • Read: Finish More Happy Than Not(Adam Silvera), Cut Both Ways(Carrie Mesrobian), Start Me Up(Victoria Dahl), An Ember in the Ashes(Sabaa Tahir), The Chief(Monica McCarty), Still the One(Jill Shalvis), Sudden Death(Allison Brennan), Right of First Refusal(Dahlia Adler), The Blade’s Memory(Lindsay Buroker), Saint and Scholar(Holley Trent), Chemical Reaction(A.M. Leibowitz), & Shallow Graves(Kali Wallace) – I finished More Happy Than Not(really enjoyed), Cut Both Ways(enjoyed but had some issues with it), Start Me Up(really enjoyed this one), and I’m 61% through An Ember in the Ashes. Enjoying this one, too. I’m behind where I wanted to be, but I don’t expect to finish all of these this week. Whatever I don’t get finished will make up part of next month’s list.

A lot of green even if there’s more red than I’d like.

Stream of Consciousness Saturday: “If/then”

Today’s Stream of Consciousness prompt is to start with “if” and try to end with “then”. I’m actually writing this Friday night(hope that’s not cheating) because we’re leaving early Saturday to drop the kids off with mother-in-law and going on a First Responders Appreciation motorcycle ride. So, I won’t have much time to get to it tomorrow. This is from Closing Time, which I’ve been struggling with this past week. I’m coming up on where this scene will likely appear, though.

“If you’re going to lean against the bar, you really should order something.”

“You know I don’t drink, Cameron.”

Cam had always hated the way his brother said his name. Like it was somehow beneath him. Like he was beneath him. “Then, I really don’t understand why you’d come into a pub. You want food, you should go grab a table. I’ll send a waitress your way.”

He heard a sound from behind him that he’d come to recognize as Gio’s amused exasperation. Really, he usually had better customer service. But, his brother had just showed up. It was over an hour drive just to come here to bother him. Not that Cam would have answered if Elliot had called first.

“I came to talk to you, Cameron.”

“And I thought I’ve made it clear to you I have absolutely nothing to say to you. So, take your private eye you sent snooping around, all your salvation talk, and go back home to Dad. I don’t-”

“He’s sick, Cameron.”

Those words stopped him. “What?”

“Dad’s sick. The doctors give him less than a year. He wants you to come home so you can make peace.”

Now, Cam felt sick. But, there was that sneer he was used to. His brother obviously had no interest in making peace with him. Not until he repented his sinful ways and saved his soul. Yeah, that wasn’t going to happen. He saw nothing sinful with the way he lived…or loved.

“Yeah, I don’t see that happening.”

“It’s the only thing he wants, Cameron. After all you’ve put him, our whole family, through the last years, it’s the least you can do.”

“No, the least I can do is nothing. And that’s just what I plan on. unless you’re going to order something, you should go.”

“You’ll regret it if you don’t even speak to him one last time.”

But, Cam just turned away from the bar and tried to act busy until he was sure Elliot had gone. When he looked up, Gio was looking right at him, something soft in his eyes. Cam had to look away from it, because it hurt. Especially with the way they’d been at odds the last several days.

“So, that’s your brother.”

Was that all he had to say? “Yep.” What else was there to say? That Elliot had been the one to out him to their father in the first place. The reason his last few months at home had been pure hell. And now he was the one trying to drag him right back to there again.

But, Gio didn’t ask any other questions just faced the bar beside Cam and took the next order. The tension that had been between them hadn’t quite disappeared, but it had faded. Well, that was something. maybe being forced to face his brother had been worth something after all then.

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