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Welcome back to another visit with the Weekend Writing Warriors, the blog hop for anyone who likes to write, where we share 8-10 sentences from a project and sometimes get creative with punctuation. 😉 I’m continuing with Hawk’s story. I skipped over some of it, but Hawk’s father was still lingering. They managed to make it away, though. This is the end of this scene:

“So,” Barbie finally said, “I take it your father hasn’t given up yet.”
I let out a rough laugh. “No, and he’s going to be after both of us now,” I said, gesturing back to where Noah clung to his seat. “With or without getting paid for it.”
“Really,” Barbie said, glancing over her shoulder, “and why’s that?”
“Meet my little brother, Noah. And my father will consider him coming with us the worst betrayal.”
“Well, that’s just wonderful,” Barbie said. Then she turned in her seat and smiled at Noah. “Welcome to the family.”

Will everyone else accept him so easily? What other trouble are they going to face? I’ll have more for you next week.

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Comments on: "Weekend Writing Warriors: “Welcome to the Family”" (17)

  1. Author Jessica E. Subject said:

    Intriguing! I wonder what danger their father will bring with him.

  2. nancygideon said:

    Nice scene! Hoping Noah made the right decision . . . but then he didn’t have much of one to begin with.

  3. Well at least Barbie’s happy about the family reuniting! But yeah, Hawk’s father seems to be so determined and ruthless, it’ll only make him worse, I’m guessing. Enjoyed the excerpt…

  4. Fathers can be awful to deal with. Good snippet!

  5. I’m getting a better feel for the overall story idea.

  6. Well, Barbie is taking all of this a lot more calmly than I would be. Good for her!

  7. Hmm, I wonder what new complications Noah is bringing with him?

  8. Diane Burton said:

    Daddy is a real problem, made worse by Noah’s betrayal (thinking from Daddy’s pov). So, how dangerous is Daddy? Good excerpt, raises all kinds of questions.

  9. Remind me to avoid any family reunions they might have planed.

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