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Welcome back to another visit with the Weekend Writing Warriors, the blog hop for anyone who likes to write, where we share 8-10 sentences from a project and sometimes get creative with punctuation. 😉 I’m sharing from the next chapter of Hawk’s story.

Barbie was stepping out of the elevator as I pulled Noah with me into the lobby of the office building. “Gavin, I was…Who’s this? What’s going on?”

I glanced over my shoulder, but there was no one there; Dad wasn’t going to risk coming in here. If he couldn’t take a shot from a distance, he wasn’t going to do it. “We need to go out the back,” I told her. “There is another exit, right?”

“Yes,” she said, “it’s back this way. Can you tell me anything?”

Is he going to tell her what’s going on.? Are they going to get out of there? What’s going to happen next?

Comments on: "Weekend Writing Warriors: “From a Distance”" (15)

  1. Good thinking to go in the building. How scary!

  2. Her DAD is the one about to take the shot?? Yikes!

  3. Dad is pretty bold and I bet he knows where the other exit is. No guaranteed escape here.

  4. Great job building tension.

  5. I like her no-nonsense response. She’s admirably quick on the uptake.

    • Well, Barbie has spent a good amount of time around these men. She knows when it’s better to wait on the questions.

  6. What a woman! Love her attitude.

  7. This snippet leaves so many great questions!

  8. Sorry to be so late commenting, was on a tight deadline for a book! So handy for them to have a place to duck into although I get the feeling Dad is pretty relentless. I enjoy the tension you’re managing to maintain for the reader, even in these quick snippets. Terrific!

    • Yeah, hawk was outside waiting for Barbie to be done with her appointment. And yeah, that he is. He won’t be leaving them alone just yet.

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