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Welcome back to another visit with the Weekend Writing Warriors, the blog hop for any who loves to write. I’m still sharing from Hawk’s story. Today’s snippet is the beginning of the next chapter, which picks up shortly after they leave for their ride.

By the time we got out on the road, the sun was riding high in the sky. It was a beautiful day, but even the full brightness of the sun couldn’t chase away the shadows that hovered over my thoughts. He was out there, my father. It was almost like I could feel his crosshairs in the middle of my back.

From the way Devil kept glancing over at me, he knew where my thoughts were going. Or maybe he had the same premonitory feeling I did.

It had been buzzing along my skin from the moment we rode away from the clubhouse. Something was going to happen today, even with our little babysitter along. I nearly snorted at that thought; Wraith would probably punch me out for thinking of him as little or a babysitter.

He might be able to watch our backs, but he wouldn’t be able to stop a sniper’s bullet.

Is Hawk’s feeling right? Is something going to happen? Will having Wraith around do any good? I should have more next week. 😉

Comments on: "WeWriWa: “His Crosshairs”" (20)

  1. I love Hawk’s intuition here. I’m kind of worried he’s right!

  2. Intense. This is such a good story. How terrible to have your own father want to kill you.

  3. Wraith as a babysitter… now THAT was funny. Nice job, Fallon. Enjoyable as always.

  4. Ooh, such ominous undertones! And on such a beautiful day too, which heightens the tension nicely. Had to grin about Wraith – very well done snippet…

  5. So maybe this outing isn’t such a great idea…but you’ve done a good job of making a showdown with his father feel inevitable.

  6. A glorious sunny day, perfect vacation weather — and a sniper is lurking. And both of them know it. Way to heighten the tension! Thanks for sharing!

  7. What a taut excerpt. It had me looking over my shoulder.

  8. Diane Burton said:

    Love this description of the premonition: “It had been buzzing along my skin” LOL at the description of Wraith as a babysitter. Good snippet.

  9. Sniper’s bullet? That sure ups the stakes.

  10. I like the contrasts in this snippet between the beautiful day and the feelings of apprehension and foreshadowing of something about to happen. Great job i creating tension!

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